I'm Going Through Changes

After careful consideration into deciding whether the first of second speech to do for the final of demonstration speeches, I have came up with the best decision: The first one.

In this speech I taught the audience How to Build a kite and ways to decorate it. It was an awesome speech, but I am going to make it better. There were many minor modifications, but here are the three main alternations
1. In the introduction, I do not have a motivation. Thus, I included one after I said what I am going to do today: Kites are usually flown on windy days. It is a great activity to do with someone and a way to make a use out of the windy weather. Trust me, I've experienced it, Back where I come from, It is windy everyday and there wasn't much to do, so I flew kites all the time.
2. To indicate movement from my last body to the conclusion, I have inserted a rhetorical question: So what have you learned today?
3. In the first presentation of this speech, I included a little description of a crappy day. However, it did not refer back to the introduction, thus I have rewritten a more pleasing and relevant ending: Knowing this, when it is windy outside and you feel bored, grab a dew materials and build a kite with someone. Trust me, it will be the best day of yor life.

So there you have it, the only three main changes that will enhance my speech.